IELTS Writing 10 - Task 2
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
Popular events like the football World Cup and other international
sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing
patriotic emotions in a safe way.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include
any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
model answer:
I DISAGREE
Nowadays, football is the most popular game in the world. We can find there are
many different teams who plays this football. There are dividing into 3
division: division one, division two and division three. Each divisions have
different skills. The skills that they have are depend on the manager. He is the
one who teachs the player how to play. By playing football, there are many
advantages and disadvantages. Firstly, the team can earn a lot of money. If we
compare the income in division one and division two are really different. The
division one will get more than division two. Because as we know, the team in
division one, they shows to the people that they are able to play better than
the others. For example: David Beckham (the player of Manchaster United). He can
earn for about £45.000 £50.000/week. It’s unbelievable. Even the prime minister
in the UK just got for about £11O.OOO/year. Secondly, they can get a lot of
spectators which makes the income increased. In one match, they can earn for
about 20 or 30 million pounds. Actually, it’s really high. For one ticket (VIP)
it can cost us a lot of money. I think for about £100 or over. That is for one
person. How if we count for a million person? There are also many disadvantages:
like from the task which says that the releasing patriotic emotions in a safe
way. Actually, I don’t really agree about that: like 2 weeks or 3 weeks ago,
there are 2 fans of Leeds United got shots. And it makes them died. Many people
come and give them flowers and also the clothes which shown they’re sad about
that.
There are other sport games like tennis. Tennis is also popular. In playing
tennis there are also have advantages and disadvantages. This games shows how
they against each other. The advantages are can earn a lot of money, can attract
the spectators (audience). There are also have disadvantages of this games, for
example: two years ago, when Monica Sales and Steffi Graph are on the match.
They play against each other then, one of the Steffi’s fan can’t stand anymore,
he killed (shots) Monica Sales. That makes Monica Sales have to stop the game.
The people are all thinking to take her to the hospital. Because of that, it
makes Monica Sales stopped from playing tennis for about a year. But now, she
has started again.
In my opinion, these sport can ease the international tensions and also can make
death from year to year become increase. So, it is very dangerous.
(437 words)
This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 4
score. Here is the examiner’s comment:
The majority of this answer has no relation to the task set: the first half is
completely irrelevant and the second part is only marginally related to the
topic. The candidate has therefore been penalised for this. There is little
meaningful message, and grammatical control is weak.